Post by Amarië on Mar 13, 2007 14:36:17 GMT -5
Here are some examples of good posts and bad. These posts are original posts written by moi and they rock so don't laugh.
Bad:
she went 2 a tall clif and fell down it and died. she was really dead "ow." she sayd. -- Umm...yeah. Ok so it's really bad there's like no capitalization or grammar usage and there's very little punctuation. Um...yeah not a lot of anything really. It's not long enough, there's chatspeak. Ugh. It's bad. >.<
Good:
Tears welled painfully up from her eyes, pouring forth in rivets of emotion. She felt bound to the death she would soon experience, wounded by its coming. A sob came from parted lips and she fell to the earth, shaken and weakened by her struggle. Many times, her attempt to lift into the sky was thwarted by her malnourished limbs but from some miracle, she found her wings. She drifted aimlessly, passing water and resting spots from which her healing could begin. In her head, she was alone, with no other in the world to be her guide.
She found herself at a precipice, a steep valley in the earth. Though it was dizzying, she swooped into it and saw the bottom studded with viciously pointed rocks. Worn by rain and wind, they were her ticket to a fast, painless death. Without a glance behind her, she stopped and hovered above the void. Tears overwhelmed her again. And finally, she raised an elegant crown to the sky and released an unearthly ghost of a bird song, and dropped into the divide, her wings folded, only ceasing her song when she was laying lifeless at the bottom.-- Ach, I'm amazing. Kidding But I think this on'es a lot better so please try and make your posts better than the top one at least. THANK YOU.
Bad:
she went 2 a tall clif and fell down it and died. she was really dead "ow." she sayd. -- Umm...yeah. Ok so it's really bad there's like no capitalization or grammar usage and there's very little punctuation. Um...yeah not a lot of anything really. It's not long enough, there's chatspeak. Ugh. It's bad. >.<
Good:
Tears welled painfully up from her eyes, pouring forth in rivets of emotion. She felt bound to the death she would soon experience, wounded by its coming. A sob came from parted lips and she fell to the earth, shaken and weakened by her struggle. Many times, her attempt to lift into the sky was thwarted by her malnourished limbs but from some miracle, she found her wings. She drifted aimlessly, passing water and resting spots from which her healing could begin. In her head, she was alone, with no other in the world to be her guide.
She found herself at a precipice, a steep valley in the earth. Though it was dizzying, she swooped into it and saw the bottom studded with viciously pointed rocks. Worn by rain and wind, they were her ticket to a fast, painless death. Without a glance behind her, she stopped and hovered above the void. Tears overwhelmed her again. And finally, she raised an elegant crown to the sky and released an unearthly ghost of a bird song, and dropped into the divide, her wings folded, only ceasing her song when she was laying lifeless at the bottom.-- Ach, I'm amazing. Kidding But I think this on'es a lot better so please try and make your posts better than the top one at least. THANK YOU.
